I got through a fair portion of the Novel. I see promise and I have enjoyed what I read. I will admit reading it was rather difficult. I needed to pay extra care and attention the majority of the time. I'll be more than happy to give it a second try some time in the future.
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I really like it so far. I hope you will continue.
Hello author! I hope you continue this amazing vn! Good luck..
Another comment pls continue this game its really good no its better than good actually no the game is really excellent i wanna know what happen
Any dates for the next update this game is too good to be true and yet here it is
Really enjoyed this, Definitely will support to get more of the story. Good work.
Your vn was alot of fun I can't wait for more
Ouargh thanks, sadly i don't think more will come
got a lot potential here just a little more work and you are golden dude i be waiting for next updates
Ahah thanks but i'm not sure anymore to continue the project. But thanks for your kind words !
To be frank the grammatical and spelling errors kinda put me off. The game itself still has potential and the potential ROs be lookin good. I'll be waiting for the new updates
I'll be brutally honest too, it's not just the grammar. The jokes feel off (like the one where you invite your boss to play video games at home as a form of flirting?) and then his rejection is even worse..
Then there's weird use of phrases like "I was so scared I didn't even flinch".
Now one bad joke and an error every once in a while is excusable but it got to a point where I had to stop playing.
I'll also say one more thing, this can't be fully fixed with a competent editor as the problems are in the story itself too. (like roomy trying to murder you then mc falling asleep and it's like nothing happened).
But yes, the fantasy setting and the characters look good. It just needs to be heavily polished. Edgy fiction REALLY needs to have very few grammar mistakes as it otherwise turns into cringe very fast.
I also hope to read it again after it's hopefully polished and edited.
Sorry if it's a bit too negative.
Don't be sorry it's okay. It's my first time trying to create something like that so i still lack of experience. English is not my main lenguage and with dyslexia it's even worse x). But anyway I'm not sure i will continue this project, but still thanks for your time
Sorry didn't mean to discourage you. If you really want to do something you can get better at it. You just need time and a bit of guidance from fellow devs can speed that up.
But some things like learning grammar, story writing need time/effort.
It looks fine so far it might take a little for me to get through the game but i will report any is issues ifind to a soon as possible
Okay let me see
I am intrested in the game I am just wondering will there be a android version. Cause I don't have a PC yet so I read visual novels on my phone.
Yep I'm currently uploading it !!
You can try now, it should be working ! Tell me if everything is ok
Hope there'll be a muscle gut dilf *w*
What do you mean ahah ? There will be other muscular guys !
Muscle gut guys. Like they are muscular, but have a beer gut, or they're a mix of chonky and muscular. And dilf because of their being older, like a daddy. :3
Well that's what i've planned for one main character ! A shark with a lot of muscle, a bit chonky and daddy like :D ! But I Can make a part two only if some people play the game x)
This character in the screenshot look so pretty and hot 🥰, this vn looks like it's going to be very good, I'll follow you to know everything about this vn ^w^